You have selected one of the following personas: Cuban Exile, Soviet Diplomat, Civil Rights Activist. In your creative response, develop at least 10 devices from the rhetorical terminology (identify their use in parenthesis). Use examples that evoke a strong emotional response to JFK's inaugural address and represent your persona's point of view. 300 words.
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Cj W.
8/23/2013 09:31:47 pm
President Kennedy, Vice president Johnson, citizens of America:
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Ms. Moriconi
8/24/2013 02:13:16 am
CJ, you create a clear portrait here, and you utilize the words of the speech for specific effect. Make sure you identify the 10 specific rhetorical and literary devices you used in developing the speech. You can submit that correction either here or to me via email.
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Cj W. (Edited Version)
8/29/2013 04:28:24 am
President Kennedy, Vice president Johnson, citizens of America:
Angelique K.
8/29/2013 02:51:31 am
I agree with all of your points, Kennedy certainly did forget about national issues in his speech, he basically only discussed global issues. Overall, your blog is very well written because it is a very realistic example of how live was for people living in that time frame.
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Bethany Balentine
8/31/2013 10:36:19 pm
I really enjoyed reading this letter back to JFK! You show many personal traits in your character such as the part when you describe how you had to sit in the back of the bus. I understood your point of view and you played the Civil Rights Activist really well. :)
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Dear Mr. President,
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8/24/2013 09:44:23 am
Dear Mr. President,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:25:53 am
Nice evidence of logos, ethos, and pathos in your piece.
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Cj W.
8/29/2013 04:09:35 am
Your speech is well thought out and structured well. I would just add in a comma or maybe parenthesis after Cuba and maybe reword this part of you speech. --> "The county I come from is Cuba you might have heard of it before it’s the one where at the moment a vicious man, Castro, who is terrorizing my fatherland, terrorizing my family, terrorizing my friends"....overall, great work though.
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Ryan M
8/29/2013 07:44:10 pm
I like how you wrote this like your in a one on one meeting with the president. It was very nicely done!
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Ryan M
8/24/2013 08:50:45 pm
With all the struggle our people have been going through, I believe that Kennedy could help gain our equal rights. Kennedy did give one very powerful speech, I must admit, but something didn't seem just right. I am starting to realize the only reason he called Mrs. King was to gain our votes and for his moment. I believe he has deceived us and he certainly has let down every last hope I had for him. If Mr. Kennedy believes such a thing shouldn’t he, as the President of the United States of America don't you think he should take care of what the majority of the people in America care about the most? If he shows us the honest words, in return he’ll gain my trust. If he shows us that end of segregation is near, in return he’ll gain all of our trust, respect, and loyalty. If Mr. Kennedy doesn't show us this, then I don't ever see us getting our equality that should be in America.
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Edited version
8/27/2013 02:35:08 am
Hello my fellow people! My name is Dr. Ryan (Alliteration) and I am going to tell you why we are all brought together today.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:27:31 am
Thanks for revising. Nice reference to sentence types.
Raegan C.
8/25/2013 05:29:10 am
To President Kennedy, on the occasion of his inauguration into the most powerful elected position of the modern world (consonance):
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:29:17 am
Excellent use of devices and the "ethos" of the Soviet Foreign Ministry in your word choice.
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Tasha Snider
8/29/2013 03:46:57 pm
This was very, for the lack of a better word, speechy! I loved how real you made it feel with even just the little name written at the bottom like a memo. You used some great metaphors and it flowed wonderfully. I enjoyed reading it!
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Trey C.
8/31/2013 02:08:31 am
Great job getting into character, I am even impressed by the fact that you were able to write your alias' name in Cyrillic letters. You paint a very clear picture with your words, and were able to keep a diplomatic tone throughout the post, instead of going too aggressively into the whole Soviet role.
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Trey Chestnut
8/26/2013 02:46:27 am
To President John F. Kennedy and his Cabinet (Allusion)
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:32:29 am
Nice mix of the Soviet position and building in the Cuban interests. Strong use of devices.
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Tasha Snider
8/29/2013 01:45:52 am
I know Ms. Moriconi already mentioned it, but I did find it really cool that you referenced the Cuban Missile crisis in your report. You were able to play the role of a Soviet very well.
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Angelique K.
8/29/2013 02:57:40 am
Wow, this blog is a really good example of how a Soviet Foreign Minister would have written to President Kennedy. You clearly show your point of view as a Soviet Minister, but it is really neat how you mention things about Cuba as well, since it was a major part of the events happening in this time frame.
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Bethany Balentine
8/26/2013 03:31:12 am
President John F. Kennedy,
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Gabrielle L
8/27/2013 05:39:56 am
I agree on your point that Kennedy focused too much on foreign affairs while there was still internal country conflict. I like how you're character has attitude and how you used the Brown vs. Board as a jump board in your third paragraph. I am a bit perplexed when your character said 'freedom or nothing at all' though. Getting some rights step-by-step, as African Americans have been doing for more an a century, is better than nothing, no? (:
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:34:51 am
Nice use of hypophora (the asking of a series of questions where you provide the answer) at the start of the piece.
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Hope BonenClark
8/26/2013 06:17:04 am
Dear President Kennedy,
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rachelp
8/27/2013 04:12:12 am
Yes I agree with the main idea you are saying. That you are simply "displeased" with his speech. It appears he isn't working on improving issues that we have IN the U.S. I like that you are telling and hoping that he will prove you wrong instead of constantly blaming him for his errors.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:37:26 am
Strong use of the devices, particularly the rhetorical fallacies. Note: anaphora only happens at the beginning of sentences. Parallelism is when it happens anywhere in the sentence (beginning, middle or end).
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daniel c.
8/30/2013 10:37:36 pm
You are spot on with this response to JFK Hope. You make it clear that you are disappointed with the president and your 10 devices are perfect
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Jurrien A.
8/26/2013 04:05:05 pm
Regarding Mr. Kennedy and his Cabinet.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:40:14 am
I enjoyed the memo format. Please make sure you identify the devices used in the piece.
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daniel c.
8/30/2013 10:39:29 pm
Just as Ms. Moriconi said, identify the devices that you used in your response. Other than that, your persona as a Soviet is very realistic in what an actual Soviet would say
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Trey C.
8/31/2013 02:14:31 am
I would hate to have been JFK when I received that letter. You stated your mind and really got a genuine Soviet perspective across. I really like how you were attacking Kennedy while still retaining a professional choice of words and a firm tone. In a word, you played a pretty good, patriotic Soviet Diplomat.
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Tasha Snider
8/26/2013 04:10:11 pm
To President Kennedy in reply to his receiving the Presidential seat:
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Maurie
8/27/2013 07:16:11 am
Tasha, I really like how you wrote this post. You worded your response in a way, that made it seem like you are a profession in the USSR.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:42:52 am
Nice identification of sentence types. Next time select a bit more variety of types of devices.
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beau T
8/29/2013 12:59:45 am
I really like how at the end you put in the sentence some more of a personal touch rather than making it a dry read. Your point was clear and your ending strong you did good work.
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Angelique K.
8/27/2013 02:38:26 am
Dear President Kennedy,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:45:33 am
Nice depth to your piece and strong use of devices. Use paragraphing to encourage readability.
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Alyssa D
8/31/2013 08:52:32 am
I really liked your examples for each device and you did a good job of creating emotion throughout
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daniel.c
8/27/2013 03:52:24 am
Dear Mr.President,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:47:33 am
Strong use of pathos, logos and ethos in your letter. Good mix of devices.
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Beau T
8/29/2013 01:01:49 am
As I could have already suspected my bro did a great Blog here, you got your point across without making all kinds of complex, and hard to read. I understood your point and what you were trying to say from the 2nd line till the last. Good job D.
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Bethany Balentine
8/31/2013 10:47:23 pm
I agreed with many of your points as I was doing the Civil Rights activist role as well. You showed your personal opinion and repeated that you were disappointed many times which helped bring your point across more. The only suggestion that I have is to be more formal with the speech and avoid words such as "I guess" and "I think".
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Darel M.
9/26/2013 07:30:17 pm
You did a good job on this playing as the role of the Civil Rights Activist. You demonstrated your position strongly and got your point across to whoever read this. Good job!
rachelp
8/27/2013 04:00:06 am
Dear Mr. President, my name is Rachelle Williams and I am a Civil Rights activist from Augusta, Georgia. Looking at the 17 African nation’s achievement of Independence makes my heart swell. News like this is exactly what I and many others want to hear. I occasionally see kind acts toward African Americans, for example last week this little white child held the door open for a black family; this is quite rare. Though this was kind I usually just see doors being slammed on African American’s minds and dreams (sentimental appeal). When I look at the progress that the U.S. has made, I am not proud
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Gabrielle Le
8/27/2013 05:54:30 am
I really like the point you made about the U.S being proud of the freedoms it offers to its citizens. Those freedoms are the very foundation of the country after all, so I agree, why not hurry and give it to African-Americans as well. I also like your point that the U.S prioritizes other country's freedoms but not the freedoms of its own people. You are very in touch with your character and paint a clear picture :D
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:50:29 am
Nice handling of the paradox of the speech. Good use of anaphora and great analogy. Note: more than one--no 's. If it is ownership, then 's.
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Gabrielle Le
8/27/2013 04:58:19 am
Mr. President John Fitzgerald Kennedy:
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Maurie
8/27/2013 07:13:49 am
Gabi, I really liked the words you choose and how you used them. I would suggest putting more emotion into a letter like this one. It just sounded like a debate.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:54:21 am
Good use of tone. Nice mix of devices.
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Alyssa D
8/31/2013 08:55:36 am
It seems like you put a lot of thought into this, and I think it's very well written. I also thought you did a good job of representing your character.
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rachelp
9/4/2013 04:42:34 am
I like how you actually focused on some of the sentence types. I noticed not that many other people did that. They focused primarily on logical fallacies. You also did a good job at becoming your character.
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Yahaira S.
8/27/2013 05:47:54 am
Dear Mr. President,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 07:56:47 am
Good use of historical reference and images. Note: it's=it is. its=possessive
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Stephen
8/27/2013 06:16:26 am
President Kennedy,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 08:02:16 am
Nice use of logical fallacies. Also enjoyed the inclusion from google translate.
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Darel M.
8/27/2013 06:20:14 am
Hello Mr. President. My name is Lavontè Brown and I am a current member of the SNCC and I just wanted to say how deeply dissapointed in your Inaugral Speech. I speak for all the African-Americans in the SNCC and the United States. I feel that you plan on restoring peace globally as one of your main priorities as president. In your speech, you say "Let both sides explore what problems unite us instead of belaborating those problems which divide us." (Anaphora). To some of us, we feel that you address the issue of the Cold War we have going on with Russia and the battle between Communism and Captialism. Where as for the other members, including me, feel that you are talking about the nation as well as the global crisis. We African-Americans have continuously fought against racism, desegregation and discrimination. And we feel it is time for a change. I recently participated in a sit-in and thinking to myself we should not be able to do these. We should not be thrown in the back of the bus everytime we need to get to the jobs we work so hard for. This is a huge (Amplification) issue that you did not address directly. I'm not saying we should be treated more superior than the whites, but to be treated like an American citizen. We want to be free, we want to be equal, we want to have equal rights as to everyone else (repitition). We want to be able to live like the 17 African nations that just earned their independence. Ever since the slave days, us blacks have been your daily pack mules and ragdolls (metaphor). We feel that it is time for a change, but apparently you do not. You care about the issue with Russia more than the issue of your own nation. In the beginning of your speech you say,"the same revolutionary beliefs our forefathers fought are still at issue around the globe". I know that you are concerned about the Cold War between Russia, but can you also pay attention to your own nation? Understand that us blacks are struggling right now. We cannot end discrimination alone. "Ask not what America will do for you, but what together we can do for the freedom of man". To us that means we need all of America, including you, to help make this nation a free and equal country. And that this change can set an example for any other countries out there that are having discrimination problems in their nation.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/27/2013 08:04:34 am
Nice play with the words. Work on identifying more of a variety of device types. Use paragraphing to help readability.
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Stephen
8/28/2013 07:13:57 am
Great speech, great use of the logical fallacies, well argued, though in all due respect if I was president i would also put nothing infront of the possibility of nuclear warfare.
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Maurie
8/27/2013 07:10:41 am
President Kennedy,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/28/2013 07:28:16 am
Nice elaboration of the persona. Good mix of devices.
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Georgie P
8/29/2013 09:04:04 pm
I liked the use of repetition in your piece, I think it was really effective and helped reinforce your argument well. Your last line was also a great example of Sentimental Appeals. Well done!
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Alyssa D
8/27/2013 07:57:55 am
To President Kennedy,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/28/2013 07:30:33 am
Build up the length of your discussion. Devices identified. Note: anaphora is when a series of sentences begin with the same phrase.
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Hope
8/31/2013 02:09:52 am
Great use of logical fallacies to enhance your argument, the only suggestion I can offer would be to make make your response a little bit longer, as Ms. Moriconi said.
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Molly Riebling
8/27/2013 08:01:26 am
Dear Mr. President,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/28/2013 07:33:16 am
Nice highlighting of specific issues and use of syntactical elements.
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Hope
8/31/2013 02:16:21 am
You made a very compelling argument and made good use of the logical fallacies, and I really liked the simile that you used:)
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Sarah P
8/27/2013 08:39:23 am
Dear Mr. President,
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Ms. Moriconi
8/28/2013 07:37:59 am
Your use of devices reflects the skill that politician's use in crafting their positions. Nice job.
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Georgie P
8/29/2013 08:59:26 pm
Your writing flowed really well and your use of techniques were all appropriately given. I think you made a strong, solid argument that I completely agree with.
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Buse D.
8/27/2013 04:13:57 pm
Dear Mr. President Kennedy,
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stephen
8/28/2013 07:11:45 am
Great passage, well written, clearly good use of logical fallacies, also liked the "big lie" part, pretty brutally honest and right to the point.
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Ms. Moriconi
8/28/2013 07:41:03 am
You highlight a clear disappointment. Good use of devices. Note: work on comma usage to direct reader through your sentences.
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Georgie Partridge.
8/29/2013 06:01:51 am
Civil Rights Activists’ Profile.
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Sarah Phillips
8/29/2013 08:39:22 am
You did a really nice job with your usage of devices. They were uniquely incorporated which made your piece a lot more interesting. The style of your writing with a strong opening statement, then backing up a bit to introduce yourself really gave your letter some personality. I really enjoyed reading this.
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Raegan C.
9/1/2013 04:07:40 am
Your first paragraph is absolutely awesome! The rest of the letter pulled together really well too, but the first paragraph is brilliant.
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