Yazeed A
10/28/2014 08:46:26 pm
Yazeed Alrajhi - 29/Oct/14
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Tomas Volenec
10/30/2014 06:17:23 am
I like your idea, but next time try to go to closer details, for example like Dagfinn did :)
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Dagfinn Knutsen (Gimme and A+)
10/28/2014 08:46:52 pm
The youth walked up to the door on the right. As he opened it he could here the moans of the tiger and he knew death was upon him. He knew what was going to happen. He stopped.....He thought.......this is what the princess wanted. She didnt want me to marry someone else, she wanted me, and if she couldn't have me, no one would. As he left his thoughts he saw the tiger and he felt a sharp claw cut open his stomach and his guts fell on the ground. But he was still alive. But all to only to feel the tiger starting to start eating his intestines. As the last light escaped, there were only guts and blood on the ground. the youth was gone.
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Yazeed A
10/29/2014 09:29:29 pm
I liked how bloody you made it, especially when his guts fell and he saw the tiger eat them.
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bailey
10/29/2014 11:54:19 pm
I like it, it felt exiting.
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Michael
10/30/2014 02:37:04 am
STOP BEING MORBID DAGFINN
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Anders Lid
10/28/2014 08:47:37 pm
As the youth opened the door, silence fell over the crowd. The spectators leaned forwards in their seats trying to see if it was the tiger or the lady behind the door. From the darkness inside, the tiger emerged, and pounced on the youth. There was blood everywhere and the man tried with all his might to throw the tiger off him. After a short struggle the tiger jumped of its prey. The man started crawling away, looking at the princess as if to ask why. She only starred coldly back at him, with a look that could only mean “If I can’t have you, no one can."
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Yazeed A
10/29/2014 09:33:01 pm
I like how dramatic the last part is.
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Dagfinn Knutsen
10/30/2014 03:48:34 am
THE ENDING....MAH GAWD
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Tomas Volenec
10/30/2014 06:16:35 am
It is funny how Dagfinn's story is simillar to this one. Nice job :)
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10/31/2014 09:57:26 pm
interesting... I like how u let him crawl some first
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BrePopr
10/29/2014 04:50:58 am
The man has to come to a choice quickly, the princess points to the right, he wonders if he should trust her with his life. The man looks up at the princess and had great fear in his eyes, he thought that if she really loved him she would not send him to the door with the tigar. He felt she would be happy for him and so he looked back at the two doors and looked back at the princess and she looked at him and then the right door the princess my a hand jesture telling him to go to the right door, she trusted her and he walked to the door, was it the one with the tigar? He placed his hand on the door the princess screams and says Nooo! Go to the left don't open that door! He turned frightend but he loved her so he listened and said to him self if I die I die for the one who I truly desire. He walked to the left door and he gripped the door handle and gently opened it to find no tigar or other women he was confused. He looked up to see the princess running down to him and she hugged him tightly and said we shall be together, he agreed. "What's behind the right door" the soon to be prince asked. Go open it and find out" said the princess. The man walked holding the princess hand and they both heard a loud grawl... He looked at her and she looked back the both opened the door to find that the one other women was waiting still, she was not pleased who the prince chose.
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Nancy Krone
10/29/2014 11:32:29 pm
The man turned around to take one last look at the princesses beautiful face, but all he was met with was cold, hard eyes staring at him. He trusted her with his life, but a sudden feeling came upon him. Everyone leaned out of their seats in excitement to see what his destiny would be. One could almost hear the prayer of the king for it to be the lion behind the door. The man’s hand was almost touching the handle of the door to the right. Then all off sudden and very slowly at the same time he went for the left door. Time paused in a moment of eagerness to know what was waiting. The princess didn’t move. He hadn’t trusted her. He had clearly seen her leading him to the right door, but chosen differently. This woman was the only one knowing the outcome of his choice and she didn’t move. Not even a little twitch. What greeted the man was not a bloodthirsty lion, but what stood upon him was a beautiful woman, in the most gorgeous dress, ready to marry him. The crowd exploded in joy with a hint of disappointment. The king however wasn’t happy; furiously he quickly marched out of there followed by the princess who shared the same mood.
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Hailey Mueller
10/30/2014 05:25:57 am
I like your sequel! I like how you described the actions and the princess.
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bailey Luijkx
10/30/2014 12:07:28 am
When he opened the door he heard a Loud Creaming Sound. He opened the door half way and saw orange fur, he thought that it what going to die at that moment but it’s proven him wrong. When he finally had the courage to open the door and face his fear. He walked in with his head held high with a serious face. He walked in and…No Tiger, while he was preparing, the tiger had already disappeared, but he turned his head and in a little corner he saw the lady shaking to death.
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Eryn Johnson
10/30/2014 01:40:27 am
The youth watched as the princess pointed him to a door. His heart pounded at the thought of this being the end of his life or his new beginning. He contemplated and paced back and forth not knowing whether to trust the princess. He looked back at the princess and she was gone. His first thought was she lied to him. He nervously walked to the door that she directed him to. He opened the door hesitantly. He closed his eyes and held his breath, ready to die. Instead something a lot smaller and less ferocious knocked him off his feet. He opened his eyes and saw the princess. Everyone in the room gasped. The king was furious at what the princess had done. But she knew she did what her heart longed for. Though the king was angry, he couldn't argue that a maiden did come out of the gate, so they were wed at once. And they lived happily ever after.
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Andreas R. Adoson
10/30/2014 04:07:06 am
I like your happily ever after ending. Nice story.
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Hailey Mueller
10/30/2014 05:27:57 am
I liked how you made your story and your ending.
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Michael Ruiz (messed up once had to restart so made it shorter XD)
10/30/2014 03:12:39 am
As the young Human walked towards the door on the right as he stopped by the door he could hear the low moaning of tigers. He stopped to think why he did this and then he remembers that he is doing this for the princess the one he loves but, if he doesn’t die now the princess will hate him for life. He walks to the door then the crowd all leans forward to the edge of the seat he looks at the princess who returns his look back with a nice warm smile. He then believes that she wants him to die but as he opens the door he finds out what happened. A lovely woman even prettier that the princess walks out and takes his hand he then figures out that the princess had rigged the door so he could live a nice and beautiful life but at the cost that the princess will never have his love but at least she will see him alive, And I will never forget that gift that the princess gave me.
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Andreas R. Adoson
10/30/2014 04:03:52 am
`The Lady, or the Tiger` by Frank R. Stockton
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Hailey Mueller
10/30/2014 05:21:05 am
When the boy walked to the door he thought that this was going to be it, a nice, pretty lady would walk out of the door in a stunning dress. But when we tried to open the door it wouldn’t open. The doorknob was stuck. The man started banging on the door. Pounding so hard the door started to crack. He gave it one last punch and down the door went. A large orange and black tiger jumped out on him and started eating him alive. The boy actually thought he had a chance, but I guess that she didn’t really love her after all.
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Dagfinn
11/1/2014 06:58:07 pm
"But i guess that she didn't really lover HER after all"....Really? You should have seen that
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Jacorian Clayton
11/9/2014 12:33:19 am
I liked the suspense you put in the story by having the door not open on the first try.
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Jaylin Harris
10/30/2014 05:23:41 am
Jaylin Harris
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Kayla Lambiase
10/30/2014 06:04:48 am
The young man believed in his beloved princess that he should trust her to lead him to the proper door, to not end his life in a cruel and gruesome death. The young commoner pointed to the right door, his legs trembling , heart pounding and eyes bulging from his scull out of fear. He could feel the sweat dripping down his forehead as he watched the door slowly creep open. The audience leans off the edge of their seats looking into the arena, the suspense is killing everyone. The gate finally opens and a large tiger struts out towards the young commoner with its head facing the ground but still making eye contact. He growls and charges toward the arena's wall jumping into the audience straight for the kings thrown, demolishing the king to pieces. Everyone is puzzled and chants negative comments. The young man's body begins to tremble and he falls to his knees in amazement that he has gained his own life back then looks back when he hears a cry, the princess comes running out to greet the love of her life.
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Jaylin Harris
10/31/2014 02:16:14 am
I like the way you changed the storyline by making the tiger go after the king instead of the youth. Great story!
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Tomas Volenec
10/30/2014 06:13:28 am
The man walked towards one of the doors, he opened the one to his right and walked in. He saw this beautiful lady. The room was like an apartment, and there was the gorgeous person in the middle of it. He asked her what her name was, while he walked towards her. Whenever he stood next to her, her respond was quick and the tone was soft, ''Caroline...'', she said. The huge conversation started, from where are you from to how old are you. It was a long night, but after a while, they got used to each other and lived till the tiger broke the both of the doors and ate them. THE END
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Jacorian Clayton
11/9/2014 12:25:16 am
The ending was very unexpected.
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Orenzy Turner
10/30/2014 06:23:14 pm
It’s a quick movement, just the flick of her right hand, such a simple jester. Something so usually meaningless, executed with ease, that movement will mean me feeling the warmth of light or coldness of death. I walk toward the door, that one moment that seems an eternity. I am putting my life in the hands of the princess, who could let me live, but will never be able to love me or to send me into the ruthless jaws of a beast. The choice is hers. I reach the door and slightly hesitate. Is this it? Will I die here dying today? Are the fates that cruel? The rope which lifts the door is being raised. I am met with the jaws of the beast. Before those teeth meet my skin I utter one word, one question.
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Jaylin Harris
10/31/2014 02:03:51 am
Great story Orenzy! I like the dramatic ending in the end about the tiger getting ready to devour its prey.
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Can
10/30/2014 06:23:56 pm
When the youth opened the door, the spectators were silent. They didnt know what was going to come out of the door.
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10/31/2014 09:55:56 pm
As the man went to open the door on the right, the princess started to wonder if she really wanted him to marry the woman behind that door. Good thing she had a plan. The young man pulled open the door and out came the gorgeous, blushing woman. "I hate her," the princess thought. The crowd apparently didn't share her hatred fore they cheered with relief. the princess decided it was time to teach her people what happens when the man she loves marries someone else. Before the priest could come out to marry the woman and young man, the princess nodded to the servant waiting by the left door. The door was thrown open and out came the tiger. The crowd shrieked, the woman screamed, and the young man jumped in front of her. The tiger quickly tore apart the man, limb form limb, and then tore apart the woman. The princess watched in gruesome delight as the tiger feasted on the dead pair. Before walking away she said, "Sleep tight my love."
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Rebecca Mann
11/3/2014 01:21:57 am
The young man stood in the arena, contemplating if he should listen to the princess or not. Yes, he did say he was in love with her, but now it was a matter of life and death, and knowing her, she would want him to get eaten by that tiger. If she couldn’t have him, no one could. So he didn’t listen to her, and chose the opposite door. Honestly, he was never in love with her. He just said so because if they did marry, he would inherit all the wealth from her royal side. So he figured that he’d go along with that lie, and it was working, up until her father found out. So he wasn’t really all that upset about marrying a fine maiden. He had looked away from the princess, and gazed down at his feet, hoping he had thought correctly. He heard some trumpets noise, and he looked up in delight, staring at the beautiful maiden walking towards him. He sighed, relieved that he would live another day.
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leanna veilleux
11/3/2014 04:33:15 am
As the heavy door was slowly opened, the man had hope in his heart and felt happy that his lover would be so kind to guide him to the correct door. When the door was opened, he was udderly astonished. So surprised that his lover would take this turn he steps back in terror. Out of the dark shade comes a beautiful girl. The girl had glorious hair and pink rosie cheeks but she wasnt as beautiful as his love. He thought for sure that she would point him to the door that held the lion because of there discussion they had. They both agreed that if one was in pain the other would be in pain so that they could unite together in unison. Although unhappy, they both knew that at least they were in each others minds. His mind set on seeing his love in heaven was destroyed. He fell to the floor and weeped his heart out as the love of his life watched him suffer. She cried but she knew that she could one day sneak off and run away with this man. She held up a finger to her lover, whispering through her tear soaked hair, " Please wait my love."
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